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The Last Trip

Photo by: Sonya – Only 100 words

“Hurray! We are going on a cruise again!” Tom squeaked excitedly as he boarded the ship after Jerry.

“This time, make sure you lie low and wait for my instructions be…” Tom dashed off before Jerry could finish his sentence.

A sense of foreboding passed through Jerry as he scurried into the kitchen after Tom.

Coast cleared! No human! Jerry heaved a sigh of relief. He scanned the entire kitchen, and finally spotted Tom on top of the table chewing a big chunk of cheese. mouse-eat-cheese

Why is the cheese on the table? Jerry wondered.

Suddenly, a human crept up on Tom and caught him by his tail.

“There’s one more!” another human pointed at Jerry.

This is a trap! The humans have been waiting in ambush! Before Jerry could move an inch, a human grabbed him from behind.

“Well done, guys!” the chef thanked the pest controller.

(147 words)

Β© 2015 Fun Simplicity. All Rights Reserved.

Written for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers, Challenge #35.

Thank you Priceless Joy for hosting the weekly challenge, and Sonya for supplying the photo.


  • a flash fiction challenge (stories in 100-175 words or less)
  • each story should have a beginning, a middle, and an end
  • no serial (continuation) stories
  • include a pingback to the challenge post



39 thoughts on “The Last Trip

  1. I agree with the others, this is a fun read! Tom and Jerry — I haven’t seen those cartoons in ages! Loved the twist you took with the prompt, writing it from the POV of a mouse! Great story and thank you for participating!

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  2. Ha! Even with your clever selection of verbs and your characters’ names, it still took me a moment to realize they were mice! What a creative spin to this prompt. They might’ve been caught, but it’s not over yet. I’m rooting for them! Excellent excellent job.

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    1. Haha…I know. πŸ˜€ Was thinking hard for their names, then Tom and Jerry came to mind so I just use it. πŸ™‚ Tom and Jerry are also names of my 2 really cute friends. Thanks for reading and commenting.

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